tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post2861600072551130454..comments2024-03-12T01:15:08.068-07:00Comments on Ashley Nixon : QueryAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00503400522084515874noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post-72578107475212277762011-05-08T18:56:02.189-07:002011-05-08T18:56:02.189-07:00Anita - Thank you so much! :) That sounds wonderfu...Anita - Thank you so much! :) That sounds wonderful!! I'll look out for it! <br /><br />Aderu - I read your post at AbsoluteWrite, you seemed to be getting a lot of help! And thank you again!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00503400522084515874noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post-43761288481011723942011-05-08T16:28:08.771-07:002011-05-08T16:28:08.771-07:00I would love to give you feedback, but I'm afr...I would love to give you feedback, but I'm afraid I'm not that much of a help when it comes to queries, and it seems you already have a lot of willing critics, heh heh. But anyway, the concept sounds great. Best of luck!Adelle Yeunghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01859129795965624500noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post-46239851944502294172011-05-08T14:50:38.371-07:002011-05-08T14:50:38.371-07:00Sounds like you're going to get a few crits on...Sounds like you're going to get a few crits on your query, which is awesomeness. I love the premise of your story and your characters already feel real to me after seeing your drawings and descrips of them a few posts prior to this one.<br /><br />BTW, I'm going to be having a contest on my blog soon where one of my agent's interns will crit someone's query letter and first ten pages. So watch for it!Anita Grace Howardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01797870961916148616noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post-67882185907953769622011-05-07T15:27:24.876-07:002011-05-07T15:27:24.876-07:00Thank you guys so much! I agree Medeia,I actually ...Thank you guys so much! I agree Medeia,I actually never realized I didn't say Barren was a pirate.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00503400522084515874noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post-21454624305233592462011-05-06T22:27:29.791-07:002011-05-06T22:27:29.791-07:00Sounds interesting.
I'd tweak the beginning a...Sounds interesting.<br /><br />I'd tweak the beginning a little.<br /><br />The last place Barren should be is in Maris (a port town with a government notoriously against pirates) the noose around his neck only solidifies that fact. <br /><br />to<br /><br />The last place Barren should be is in the port town of Maris; the noose around his neck only solidifies that fact.<br /><br />The town against pirates seems redundant since we can assume piracy is against the law, plus the deletion makes the sentence stronger.<br /><br />Have a great weekend.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post-11588215040743008782011-05-06T19:19:07.747-07:002011-05-06T19:19:07.747-07:00...well written query, and wishing you the best. Y......well written query, and wishing you the best. You've got the talent, but the key is patience, something we all struggle with. Somewhere out there is your agent...it's simply a matter of sniffing him out:)<br /><br />ELElliot Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06319271528871804399noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post-44475563778121089132011-05-06T12:56:37.361-07:002011-05-06T12:56:37.361-07:00lol! Thank you for you compliment! That's alwa...lol! Thank you for you compliment! That's always encouraging! :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00503400522084515874noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post-686613922232316212011-05-06T12:47:36.858-07:002011-05-06T12:47:36.858-07:00Unfortunately, I won't be any help with the qu...Unfortunately, I won't be any help with the query process yet, but your story sounds intriguing. :-)<br /><br />Yep. No help at all. Anyway. Have a great weekend!Misha Gerrickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06364173848456424521noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post-4457749688661374332011-05-06T08:31:02.633-07:002011-05-06T08:31:02.633-07:00E-mail sounds great!! :) and I definitely will! I ...E-mail sounds great!! :) and I definitely will! I need all the help I can get!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00503400522084515874noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post-67238598545311167032011-05-06T08:12:21.972-07:002011-05-06T08:12:21.972-07:00OOOOO please continue to post your query journey I...OOOOO please continue to post your query journey I'd love to be a part of that!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post-51605728408588097452011-05-06T07:45:18.839-07:002011-05-06T07:45:18.839-07:00Hey Ashley, I'm going to shoot you an email as...Hey Ashley, I'm going to shoot you an email as well with my critiques, if that's okay!Lori M. Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04858438789496971734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post-88845879362114293102011-05-06T06:55:08.640-07:002011-05-06T06:55:08.640-07:00Hello!! Thank you very much! :) I'm so glad yo...Hello!! Thank you very much! :) I'm so glad you found me!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00503400522084515874noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post-62980157627284307642011-05-06T06:16:49.881-07:002011-05-06T06:16:49.881-07:00Hi, Ashley. Sounds like an interesting YA read! I ...Hi, Ashley. Sounds like an interesting YA read! I found you from Anita Howard's blog. Congrats on the award!Marybkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12013291291298167627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post-17798239444779748172011-05-05T21:29:25.519-07:002011-05-05T21:29:25.519-07:00Yes! That would be lovely. I don't know if you...Yes! That would be lovely. I don't know if you can see my e-mail on my page. You can use Ashley.M.Nixon-1@ou.eduAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00503400522084515874noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6402640602628647606.post-60759861989336941312011-05-05T21:21:32.980-07:002011-05-05T21:21:32.980-07:00Can I send you an email with some critiques in it?...Can I send you an email with some critiques in it?Kayeleen Hamblinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07652280450104899423noreply@blogger.com